IELTS Writing Task 2 — Crime and Justice: a Band 9 sample answer
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This opinion essay argues firmly that long prison sentences alone rarely cut crime. It shows how a Band 9 answer states a clear position up front, then defends it with two developed reasons before a tidy, decisive conclusion.
The question
Some people believe that the most effective way to reduce crime is to give criminals longer prison sentences. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Band 9.0 model answer
Many governments respond to public anxiety about crime by promising tougher, longer prison terms. While I accept that serious offenders must be removed from society, I largely disagree that lengthening sentences is the single most effective way to bring crime down. In my view, prevention and rehabilitation achieve far more lasting results.
The chief weakness of long sentences is that they do little to address why people offend in the first place. Most crime is rooted in poverty, addiction or a lack of opportunity, and a cell does nothing to repair those underlying problems. Indeed, prisons can deepen them: a young man jailed for a minor theft often emerges more hardened, having spent years among career criminals. Norway, which favours shorter sentences and intensive rehabilitation, has one of the lowest reoffending rates in the world, while countries that lock people away for decades frequently see released prisoners return within months.
A wiser approach, therefore, is to invest in prevention before crime occurs and rehabilitation afterwards. Well-funded schools, youth clubs and drug-treatment programmes steer vulnerable people away from offending, and they cost taxpayers far less than a prison place. When punishment is necessary, pairing it with education or vocational training gives offenders a genuine path back into ordinary life. People with jobs and stable homes simply have less reason to break the law.
In conclusion, although prison clearly has its place for dangerous individuals, I do not believe that ever-longer sentences are the answer to crime. Tackling its causes and helping offenders change offers society a safer and more affordable future.
Why this scores Band 9.0
Task Response
Takes a clear, consistent position (largely disagree) in the introduction and defends it with two fully developed reasons, ending in a decisive conclusion that answers the question directly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea shown early ('The chief weakness…', 'A wiser approach…'). Linking is natural and varied rather than mechanical, guiding the reader smoothly.
Lexical Resource
Exact topic vocabulary ('reoffending', 'rehabilitation', 'vocational training', 'hardened') is used correctly and flexibly, with word partnerships like 'address underlying problems' and 'steer vulnerable people away'.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
A wide mix of structures — relative clauses, participle phrases ('having spent years…') and conditionals — is used with near-perfect control and no mistake that gets in the way of meaning.
Useful vocabulary
- reoffending
- committing a crime again after already being punished for one
- rehabilitation
- the process of helping an offender return to a normal, law-abiding life
- hardened
- made tougher and less likely to change, often in a negative way
- vocational training
- teaching the practical skills needed for a particular job
- deterrent
- something that discourages people from doing something
- underlying
- hidden beneath the surface but acting as the real cause
Frequently asked questions
Do I have to choose one side completely in an agree/disagree essay?
No. A nuanced position like 'I largely disagree' is perfectly acceptable at Band 9, as long as your stance is clear and consistent throughout the essay.
How many examples should I include?
One or two well-chosen examples per body paragraph is plenty. A single developed example, like Norway here, is far stronger than a list of vague ones.
Is it fine to use 'I' in Task 2?
Yes. Task 2 invites your opinion, so first-person phrases such as 'In my view' are expected and appropriate in formal academic writing.
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